Chapter 1472 Joint Creation
In Shen Long's view, no matter how mysterious the experts say, literary works must always have the power to move people, and only good works can move people.
Xiao Suizi took the manuscript and began to browse quickly. At the beginning, there was a shy smile on the corner of his mouth, but as the reading progressed, this smile gradually froze, and his eyes began to moisten. When he saw Sun Desheng shouted the sentence " Cavalry company, charge!" At that time, she couldn't stop crying.
"Why are you still crying? Could it be that my writing is too bad?" Shen Long hurriedly asked, and quickly took out a handkerchief and handed it to her.
"It's okay, it's okay." Xiao Suizi took out his handkerchief and wiped it, "You wrote it so well, especially the last scene, which made me cry." Xiao Suizi said embarrassingly.
This kind of heroic sacrifice of heroes and soldiers has appeared in many revolutionary works, such as Wang Cheng's "For victory, shoot at me" in "Heroes and Sons and Daughters", such as "For the new China" in "***" , go forward", these are good works that make people cry.
In addition to absorbing the strengths of these classic works, Shen Long's novels also added some things of his own to make the characters more vivid and fleshy; in addition, Xiao Suizi just returned from the cavalry regiment, and the impression was even deeper .
"I heard that you went to their military history exhibition room when you were at the military horse farm? Where did you hear this story?" Xiao Suizi asked. Such a story is definitely not his personal experience, and he heard the news before associating , she made a good guess.
"Yeah, I used to hear people say that the victory of the revolution was hard-won, and I didn't know what it was until I got there." Shen Long sighed, thinking of those comrades who died in the world of "Bright Sword".
"By the way, how is this article? I always feel that my writing is too ordinary, and I am afraid that I am not worthy of these revolutionary martyrs who died." Shen Long scratched his head pretending to be embarrassed.
"The writing is quite good, although there are still some problems in the past, such as typos, sentences are not smooth, etc., and the overall structure is also somewhat indiscriminate. For example, the description of Sun Desheng's growth process is a bit too cumbersome, resulting in insufficient focus at the end. Spit out; but I can still see that the rich emotion contained in this article is the most important." Xiao Suizi carefully helped him analyze, "I must be slightly better than you in terms of adjusting sentences and frame structure. Be more mature, but if you ask me to write, I won't be able to write this feeling."
This is also a question that Shen Long left on purpose so that Xiao Suizi could help revise it. Again, in Liu Feng's capacity, it would be a bit too exaggerated to present a mature work as soon as he came up.
"I still need to learn more from you, can I trouble you to change it for me? It's the same as before, when the time comes, we will hand it over to Political Committee Ning together." Shen Long said smoothly.
"No problem." Xiao Suizi was also very happy to be able to participate in the creation of a good work. She put away the manuscript, "I will start to revise it when I go back, and try to improve it within three days."
"That's... that is, when the time comes to submit an article, don't you need to write my name?" Her name was included in the last article, and she was praised by the political commissar for it. This is a good thing for others, but it can be put in However, Xiao Suizi felt that she was a bit too showy, and her father's problems had formed her habit of being cautious.
"Look at what you said, you should add your name when you help, otherwise the regiment will say that I took the credit for you." Shen Long persuaded, "Besides, your father's grievances are also ordinary. ,
You don't have any psychological pressure anymore. "
Xiao Suizi remembered the matter of her father. Her father wrote the script for a great director but did not have the right to authorize it. This incident has always made her a little uncomfortable. Now that Shen Long said so, she no longer insisted, "Then I will correct it. Let's talk about it later."
When Xiao Suizi returned to the dormitory, Hao Shuwen and the others were startled, "Suizi, why are you crying? Is it... someone bullied you?" They didn't mention Liu Feng's name. It is impossible to do such a thing.
"No, no, when Liu Feng visited the military history exhibition room at the military horse farm, he heard them talk about the events of the cavalry regiment, and wrote a novel when he came back, which made me cry." Xiao Suizi quickly explained.
"I said so." Hao Shuwen and the others immediately relaxed, and then immediately became surprised, "Liu Feng can still write novels? Didn't you edit the article last time? What did he write at the beginning? He It’s also a little... a little too ignorant, right?” Yes, you go to help repair a table and bench, build a sofa, etc. We still believe that you are also doing such lofty tasks as writing novels?
"No, the last article was actually quite good, but there was a slight problem with the sentence, and I didn't really help much." Xiao Suizi was knowledgeable, and she knew that a good article was not just about well-written words and gorgeous rhetoric.
"Hurry up and let's take a look." Hao Shuwen snatched the manuscript, and Lin Dingding and He Xiaoping leaned together to read it together, "Hey, what am I supposed to be, or these old-fashioned stories..." For these little girls For me, the stories of the revolutionary period have long been tired of hearing, and some are not attractive enough.
But with the deepening of reading, when they saw the last scene, their eye circles were still a little red. The appeal of literature is common, and they were a little silent when they returned the manuscript to Xiao Suizi.
Xiao Suizi began to revise on the table, and the others went back to bed and lay down to rest. Hao Shuwen began to ask Lin Dingding whether she likes a photographer or a doctor. He Xiaoping didn't speak, but occasionally looked at Xiao Suizi's back, with It was full of envy, and I don't know if this envy is because she can write articles, or for other reasons.
It took three days for Xiao Suizi to remove the unnecessary repetition, correct some sentences and typos that were not smooth, and then return the manuscript to Shen Long.
"Yo, it's been changed so quickly. Are you tired these days? It's all my fault for causing you trouble." Shen Long thanked him, and then read the article carefully, "Sure enough, you are the best, so you changed it like this It’s much better, let’s show it to Political Commissar Ning together?”
Then I brought Xiao Suizi to the office of Ning Political Commissar without any explanation, "Political Commissar, when I went to the military horse farm to perform a few days ago, I heard them tell the stories of the revolutionary martyrs, and I had some ideas, and then I wrote this article, Xiao Comrade Suizi helped me to modify it, and now I will show it to you."
"Hey, Liu Feng, you're going to change your career to become a writer!" Commissar Ning laughed.
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