Chapter Six Routine and Opinion

"Um……"

Yan Yan carefully read the name in his hand, and then read it a second time and a third time, but every time he read it, he seemed to be able to find new highlights from the name.

As she had guessed before, Shen Xin's storyboarding was better than those of her peers, and the same was true for this manuscript titled "The Equation of Love".

In addition to the excellent storyboard, compared with "The Witch", it has also greatly improved the composition, the use of perspective skills is reasonable, and the depiction of the characters is more solid. More importantly, the story is better than the bad street "" The Witch is a few notches above.

No matter whether it is a novel or a comic, there will always be succession and transition. It is relatively simple to complete this process for novels or comics, because it can have enough space to set the foreshadowing in the early stage, shape the characters, and surprise the readers in the follow-up.

Short comics and novels are not the same, it requires the writer to control the "language" must be refined.

The "language" of a novel is writing. Superb writing can replace a paragraph with a few words or even one or two words. For comics, "language" is more reflected in "shots".

Within a fixed number of pages, how to select the sub-shots that can best express the story, so that readers can understand the author's mind, determines the level of the cartoonist.

Generally novices can't do this, but the name of "Equation of Love" has done it perfectly.

Sure enough, I did not guess wrong... He does have extraordinary strength, and, in the expression of the story, he has also improved a few levels——

An introverted boy has a crush on an equally introverted girl.

On a graduation trip, the boy finally plucked up the courage to confess his love to the girl, but because of misunderstandings one after another, the direction of the story was led to a strange place.

For example, in the early part of the script, the boy finally makes an appointment with the girl with the help of his friends. When the male protagonist was buying drinks, the fountain next to the girl suddenly sprayed water, which drenched the female protagonist's clothes.

When the boy came back, he found that the girl had already left.

He searched everywhere, and finally found the girl in a nearby grove, but saw the girl hugging another boy. In fact, this "boy" was a female classmate in the class, but he always dressed up as a boy, but the panicked boy didn't notice this and left silently, so the two of them had a misunderstanding.

Next, there were several misunderstandings like this. In the end, when the boy returned to school, he finally expressed his heart, and the lovers finally got married.

This comic is relatively smooth in terms of beginning, inheritance, and transition. If Yan Fang was just an ordinary reader, he would definitely applaud this story, but...

Yan Yan suddenly stood up from his seat.

"Is there any problem?" Shen Xin also stood up.

"Sit down first, and I'll pour you two cups of coffee."

After Yan Fang left, Shen Xin glanced at the manuscripts on the round table, thinking about what Yan Fan was thinking.

Is it over, or not?

The story of this comic is written by himself. Although some "routines" are used, the effect of plot twists should be achieved.

As for the key point "misunderstanding", it is used in many love comics in the 11th area of ​​the earth, and it is not a new routine...

Just when Shen Xin was thinking wildly, Yan Qu walked into the cubicle and handed a cup of coffee to Shen Xin.

"Let's talk about this manga..." Yan Yan took a sip of coffee, pondered for a while, and explained, "First of all, my first impression of this short manga is that it is very good, it is an excellent love manga. If you publish it directly, you should be able to achieve good results, maybe you can directly win the serialization——If your goal is only serialization, then it is completely fine. But I think your goal should be more than that, right?"

Shen Xin nodded.

Possess the big killer of "comic capsule",

If the goal is only serialization, it would be too reckless.

Of course, after the serialization, he can "refer" to the comics he has read before in terms of plot, storyboard, composition, etc. The results should not be a problem, but he still wants to know what are the shortcomings of his original works.

"I'll just say three points. First, in the 40 pages of name, you created three misunderstandings. Although it makes the direction of the story very interesting, the reader will feel tired after reading it. From the beginning to the end, the whole A manga has been keeping the reader on edge, no buffer, I suggest removing at least one misunderstanding...it might be better if two misunderstandings could be replaced by other plots. As for the reason for doing this...that's what I'm going to say The second point—you have to prepare for the upcoming long-form manga.”

"A long comic?" Shen Xin really didn't think of this question.

"That's right, when you open most of the manga, the word 'routine' is written all over it. This is true for shounen manga and girl manga. Take love novels as an example. The reason why the story can move forward is nothing more than new characters. The addition of a new character brings a series of problems, such as "misunderstanding" or "love triangle", and the new character added is usually the protagonist's childhood sweetheart. The protagonist must make a decision between the "new love" and the "old love". Choices, these are routines.

"But don't use these elements too much in short comics. After all, the serialized comics will be used repeatedly. If you use too much, there will be no novelty at that time, and it is easy to lose readers."

Shen Xin rubbed her chin when she heard this.

Not all of Yan Fang's words were correct, but at least he agreed with one point. In the 40-page name, he really stuffed too many things, making the work too bloated, and it seems that it needs to be streamlined.

"What about the third point?" Shen Xin was puzzled.

"When it comes to the third point, I get angry." Yan Kun folded his arms and looked gloomy, "The readers of juvenile comics are boys, so you have to catch their attention, that is, their curiosity about girls—— In other words, this manuscript does not have the 'meat' style that you are good at."

"Disheveled clothes, half-fruits, and even fat ci that are exposed intentionally or unintentionally, these contents are not reflected in the comics. What are you going to rely on to attract people? Misunderstandings or coincidences between the hero and heroine? Please, readers don't have much patience to read You lay the groundwork for the plot. If there is no attractive point, your subsequent serialization will only be popular for three issues."

"..."

Shen Xin had dark lines all over his head, these words that even he himself was embarrassed to say, but Yan Yan said them without any scruples.

"The plot... I think the plot of the story can make up for this." Shen Xin said seriously.

He must adhere to the final bottom line - try to minimize the appearance of unsuitable images for children.

"Cough... The latest news I got is that "Dreamer" is going to be revised. Like "New World", it is also a weekly magazine, and the blockbuster newcomer they plan to launch is the Chen Zijiao we met a few days ago. You wouldn't think Lost to him?" Yan Yu said.

Shen Xin nodded, he didn't want to lose to Wang Wenhong and Chen Zijiao.

"By the way, Chen Zijiao also wants to write short stories, right?"

"No need. "Dreamer" deliberately found a script for him. It is said that it is a well-known talented writer in China, tailor-made for him... If you want a screenwriter, I can find it for you, but the draft fee must be shared equally. Why? Like?" Yan Yan asked.

joke! The money obtained must not be distributed to other people.

"Reject! I will improve the new name as soon as possible according to your opinion." Shen Xin promised Yan Yu.

After hearing Shen Xin's words, Yan Fang had a smile on his face.